The map below shows the village of Stokefort in 1930 and 2010.

The map below shows the village of Stokefort in 1930 and 2010.
The map illustrates how the
village
of Stokefort developed in the period of 80 years. In 1930,
village
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has its traditional form of life, consisting of farmlands to the
north east
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and south. Alongside the river, it was a path,
only
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connected the north to the South. Just off the main
road
, there were a number of
houses
and shops
as well as
post
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a post
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office. In the eastern part of the river, there were a primary school and
also
gardens, which led to large
houses
. By 2010,
village
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had
underwent
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some changes. The
road
had more branches, all of which
surrounded
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by
houses
,so the number of
houses
had increased significantly. Gardens were removed,
while
new large
houses
and retirement
home
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homes
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were constructed,bringing access to the main
road
with one of the
road
branches. There were
also
two
houses
adjunct
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primary
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the primary
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school.
Moreover
, the path which used to connect gardens and river and
also
the shops, near the
road
,
were
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removed.
Overall
, the
village
of Stokefort changed significantly from 1930 to 2010. There were extensive developments with regard to accommodation. Some
houses
and facilities like post
office
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offices
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and primary
school
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schools
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remained unchanged.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Replace the words village, road, houses with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.

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