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Most countries have traditional celebrations that occur annually. In your opinion, what benefits do these celebrations have for society? Support your opinion with reasons and example from your own Knowledge and experience.

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Annual old-school celebrations are common in many countries. I believe despite a few drawbacks, these events have beneficial outcomes for society. Celebrating events with annual reoccurring is a worldwide tradition.
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 the most important disadvantage of
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 events is the huge amount of costs they lay on the
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's shoulders.
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 these costs were paid by the
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, they originally came from taxpayers' pockets.
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 many enjoy the annual occasions, there are some
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 who do not enjoy
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 occurrences even though they paid the same amount of tax. The
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 should address these concerns as they are
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 a part of the community.
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, I believe
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 matters could benefit society in many ways.
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, these country-wide gatherings could result in the reconnection of
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 with their culture. As communities attend to
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 matters, social health and attitudes grow exponentially. These reoccurrences provide a hub for
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 to socialize with more ease.
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,
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 the importance of these traditions, the
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 lays out compatible holidays.
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 holidays are needed for
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 to keep their work-life balance. Spending time distant from work is an important issue to consider for better mental health.
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,
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 can go on trips and gather with their distant relatives which is another ideal situation for socializing. In conclusion, despite the mentioned drawback I believe making time to connect with culture, tradition, and family
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 obligating
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 to distance themselves from work could be beneficiary for the whole society.
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