The wealth gap between 1st world countries and 3rd world countries seems to be increasing. How can we reduce this gap? Do you think that developed countries have a duty to assist developing countries in every way?

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between industrialized and poor
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every single day. In my opinion, in order to reduce
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the developed
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should provide financial and physical
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to poor
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, I believe the affluent
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responsibility to help the poor
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with, there are several ways
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contribute to
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the
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between wealthy and poor
nations
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, the rich
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can provide funds to support the economy of poor
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, which
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this
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can help the governments in underdeveloped
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to make improvements in crucial infrastructure namely, healthcare,education,
roads
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,
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developed
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can invest money in developing
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in long-term projects
such
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power plants,
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projects can provide
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and income for local people, and
also
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give them access to better services to enhance their quality of living .
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, I strongly believe the affluent
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are responsible
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the developing
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in different
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is because by helping
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we can
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healthy
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environment for all people worldwide .
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, if
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industrialized
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provide vaccines and medical equipment to fight illnesses
such
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as
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Ebola, HIV,
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, which means
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assist can prevent
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diseases
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around the world.
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, some
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developed
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countries
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like
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the UK,
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French
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in the past
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natural
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underdeveloped
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, and they should remove their mistakes by
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these
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, the industrialized
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should provide
finanical
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and physical
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in order to reduce
this
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gap
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, I believe mandatory
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affluents
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nations
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to help poor
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,
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theses
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countries
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can provide
healthy
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environment for all individuals
global
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Task Achievement
To improve task response, ensure all parts of the task are addressed clearly and fully, particularly the second part of the question about whether developed countries have a duty to assist.
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Coherence and Cohesion
Strong introduction and conclusion that clearly present and summarize your viewpoints.
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You have logical points that discuss the financial and physical aid that could be provided to developing countries.
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