Some people believe that allowing children to make thier own choices on everyday matters is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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There is a view that it can cause concerning
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for both the individual and
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to make every decision by
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,
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it can be problematic in some cases,
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should hold their right to decide their own company for the sake of their adulthood. On the one hand, one of the main
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that can
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if
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can decide every choice they face is the entitlement.
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might cause them to believe that everything can be determined by their choice
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it is never the case when they
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into adulthood.
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, a
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who has grown
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might feel desperate if he is not selected by any enterprises. Another worrying aspect is that
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cannot have responsibilities for what they do.
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fact, the consequence could be possible dangers of crime without any restriction from parents on
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, in my opinion, the advantages of permitting
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make their original desition are enough to outweigh these aforementioned drawbacks, with appropriate set
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place. The most obvious of these is a greater sense of autonomy, which can be
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empowering
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sense is extremely valuable because it has been shown as a necessary catalyst for drive and enthusiasm towards what they plan to do. A second benefit is that they can learn the management skill over their action. If,
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, a child always depends on
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anything
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own. In conclusion,
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the pitfalls of accepting
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over what they choose are the sense of entitlement and
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potential
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decision
should lie with
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themselves on the basis that the
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an impetus to master what they want and
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