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Children are facing more pressure nowadys from academic, social and commrcial perspectives. What are the causes of these pressures and what measures should be taken to reduce these pressures?

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Today
children
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 are really under the pressure of society. Society has high expectations for the next generation compared to the previous one, which
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due to
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 several reasons:
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mankind has accumulated a huge array of academic knowledge and is constantly improving the education programs for
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, which has an impact on schoolchildren and students.
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, the speed of development of the economy and individual branches of science requires the new generation to have deeper and more extensive knowledge and skills.
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, family reasons. Parents set the pace of raising
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 trajectory of education and require the child to
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 it. To reduce the pressure, in my opinion, it is necessary to pay more attention to the problems of
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, to study at the level of academic universities,
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 discuss them at the state level.
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,
children
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 suffer from the expectations placed on them by society and the family.
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 trend is incorrect and subject to change.
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