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The maps below show the center of a small town called Islip as it is now, and the plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show the center of a small town called Islip as it is now, and the plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The first map shows the centre of a town called Islip in its present day
while
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 the second map illustrates a development plan for Islip in the
future
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.
Overall
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, It can be clearly seen that in the
future
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, Islip will be larger and bigger in facilities in order to accommodate people.
First,
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A
road
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 has been changed from a single main
road
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 to a larger dual carriageway.
As a result
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 of a change in
road
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, the Islip’s countryside will disappear in the
future
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.
In addition
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, it is obvious that the main
road
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 at the present day has been replaced by pedestrians only.
Moreover
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, shops have merged into a shopping centre with a bus station and car
park
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 beside. The number of housing,
however
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, has increased as there are two housing in the current but in the
future
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plan
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 two more housing will be developed next to a car
park
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 where it used to be shops and one next to the
park
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. Another interesting point is that a
park
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 as it is now and a
park
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 in the
future
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 plan will be totally different in terms of its scale.
Park
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 in the
further
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 development will indeed get smaller and
also
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 school, it is noticeable that the school will be expanded a little bit in the
future
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 town development.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words future, road, park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dual carriageway
  • pedestrian-only street
  • reroute
  • infrastructure
  • development plan
  • proposed
  • augmentation
  • north side/south side
  • housing/residential area
  • accessibility
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