In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

Agriculture is one of the most prominent

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providing food to humans all over the world and

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technology and even

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the

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field development happening in the sector of farming.

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many

people

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around the world are having no food to eat.

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causes of

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problem and measures

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be done to improve the state of the issue.

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and technology

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required. Money is

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increased .For using the machine, Creating suitable climate field farmers need a large amount of finances to access

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inventions of

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with poor wealth cannot afford Tas leads to less than

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amount

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from the field production.

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issue can be recognised by

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a person practising agriculture can we had to a certain level with funds Or other areas are

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encountering enhancement when

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to agriculture

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has made

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excel in various departments with attractive incomes and gives a boost to one's social

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life. With all the reasons above one loses interest in

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growing industry.

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decrease in industrial outcomes despite

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having all possible working models,

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diminishing .

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can be taken as

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loving at having self-esteem of carrying out. Successful

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will never

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of working in

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line of livelihood.

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can be avoided by creating a desire in

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towards working aspects of cultivating the soil,

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and rising

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rising

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livestocks

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livestock

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increasing

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production and taking appropriate measures in order to see if pause or

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the livelihood. If not

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execution can be followed.

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Jun 15, 2023

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

272 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

inequality
distribution
access to resources
climate change
natural disasters
political factors
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population growth
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Building underground transport systems (subways) is the best way to deal with traffic problems in cities.

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