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The graphs below show how people in a European city reached their office and got back home in 1959 and 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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This
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 graph depicts how citizens in European cities reached their work and got back home in the period between 1959 and 2009.
According to
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 what is shown,
it is clear that
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 in the 50th
people
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 preferred to go to their office on
foot
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 as the average was 55%, which means half of the
people
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 there were walking on their
foot
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,
while
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 in the earlier 20th the first choice was by their own car as the ratio reached to 35%,
however
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 in 1959 the second choice was by buses, train and another way of transportation, as the average of
people
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 who preferred to uses these ways 15%,
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 in 2009 the second option was on their
foot
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 which there was 25% of
people
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 went to their office by
foot
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, in 2009
people
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 did not use buses, trains, and other ways of transportation, which is why the ratio was low between 12% to 15%.
To sum up
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, in 1959 European
people
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 walked a lot, as in 2009 the ratio of walking had declined to more than half.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, foot with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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