The graphs below show how people in a European city reached their office and got back home in 1959 and 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show how people in a European city reached their office and got back home in 1959 and 2009.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
This
graph depicts how citizens in European cities reached their work and got back home in the period between 1959 and 2009.
According to
what is shown,
it is clear that
in the 50th
people
preferred to go to their office on
foot
as the average was 55%, which means half of the
people
there were walking on their
foot
,
while
in the earlier 20th the first choice was by their own car as the ratio reached to 35%,
however
in 1959 the second choice was by buses, train and another way of transportation, as the average of
people
who preferred to uses these ways 15%,
while
in 2009 the second option was on their
foot
which there was 25% of
people
went to their office by
foot
.
Additionally
, in 2009
people
did not use buses, trains, and other ways of transportation, which is why the ratio was low between 12% to 15%.
To sum up
, in 1959 European
people
walked a lot, as in 2009 the ratio of walking had declined to more than half.
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