The diagram below shows how rain water is collected and then treated to be used as drinking water in an Australian town. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The diagram below describe

that

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apply

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how

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rain

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rainwater

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water

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is collected and

then

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treated to be used as drinking

water

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in an Australian town.There are different equipment for collecting

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rain

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rainwater

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water

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and treated drinking

water

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.(four houses,two tanks,

water

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filter

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and some pipes for

transmit

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the

water

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,the diagram

illustrate

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that,

firstly

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we need to

rain

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all of

this

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proces

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process

.The

equipments

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equipment

types of equipment

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which help us for collecting and

treated

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treating

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to be used as drinking

water

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are like

ring

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a ring

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and

this

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is not

closed

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system.

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the

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rain

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rainwater

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water

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down to the roof of

house

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the house

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and through the pipes

transmitted

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is transmitted

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water

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the water

a water

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filter

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.The

water

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filter

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essencial

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essential

apparatus,because there are some dirty chemicals in the rainwater and the

water

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filter

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help us

for

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clean these chemicals.After filtered

water

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pass to

pipes

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and visit to the tanks,there are 2 tanks,

first

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tank

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storage

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a storage

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tank

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.and after the

water

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transmitted

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is transmitted

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water

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the water

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treatment

tank

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and some chemical

proces

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processes

happen in

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tank

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Finally

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drinking

water

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is ready.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "firstly".

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.

Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 85%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words rain, water, filter, tank with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
4
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

157 words

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The diagram below shows how rain water is collected and then treated to be used as drinking water in an Australian town. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

the most important aim science should be to improve peoples lives. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statment?

Healthcare should always be funded by governments, and it should always be free for people to use.’ To what extent do you agree or disagree with this idea?

Many developed countries are giving financial aid to poor countries. However, this hasn’t solved the problem of poverty in these nations and so other types of help are needed. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?

you are taking a course at a local collage. the deadline for your project was last week but you have not finished it. write a letter to lecturer. introduce yourself explain why you have not handed in the project yet. request more time to do it.