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The advocates of international aid believe that countries have a moral obligation to help each other, while the opponents consider it unnecessary, because money is misspent by the governments that receive it. Discuss these two points of view and give your opinion.

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International
aid
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 refers to
money
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, equipment or services that are provided by a country or international organisation for
countries
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 that need them, known as recipient
countries
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. It reflects a moral ideal of mankind,
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, mutual support and interdependence,
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 those donor
countries
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.
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, some people adopt an opposing view and tend to believe that
aid
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money
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 can be misspent by the recipient
countries
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. My view is that people should not withhold the provision of
money
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 or material resources in
aid
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. Humanitarian
aid
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 is a moral imperative. Members of the global community have the responsibility to provide
relief
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 to each other, especially to those disadvantaged members and those victims of natural disasters and civil unrest.
This
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aid
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 is essential to the homeless and useful in helping recipient
countries
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 return to their normal state after major disturbances.
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, with the humanitarian
relief
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 obtained worldwide on an annual basis, victims of natural disasters (
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 as
tsunami
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tsunamis
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,
draught
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drought
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,
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and flood
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flood
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floods
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) throughout the world can recover rapidly and rebuild their homeland. Humanitarian
relief
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 is meanwhile an instrument to promote peace and security. The deep-rooted hostility between some
countries
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 can result from the disparity in the material standard of living, or from physical distance. The provision of humanitarian
relief
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 opens up the possibility of cultural, economic and social interaction between
countries
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,
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thereby easing tension. Recipient
countries
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 can
thus
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 participate in the global economy, a strategic step in shaking off poverty. Admittedly,
aid
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money
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 is sometimes misused or spent on unintended destinations, but these pitfalls can never overshadow the benefits. Misuse can
instead
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 raise awareness of the global community to a venal regime and pressure the recipient country to adjust its system. Meanwhile, it can be tackled by tight regulations and scrutiny. In general, the abuse of international
aid
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 is an isolated event, so its effect should not be overstated. From what has been discussed above, one can reach a conclusion that the role of humanitarian
relief
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 is not only to deliver urgent assistance to populations in need but
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 to strengthen ties between
countries
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.
Although
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 fraud and corruption occur every now and
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, they can be addressed in a way that enhances future
aid
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 endeavours.

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