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Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is positive or negative development?

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Nowadays, people all over the world are able to buy identical
products
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,
therefore
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 countries are becoming similar. On the one hand, similar
products
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 can influence
to
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the local markets. Because each nation has
own
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its own
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, unique cultural signature that
related
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 to its history, nature and religion. Too
much
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many
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 cheap identical
products
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 reduce the
possibilities
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possibility
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 to sell local handmade
products
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with
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at
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 good
price
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prices
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.
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, jewellers that make Kazakh national things using different ornaments and unique
design
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designs
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 have to decrease the prices
according to
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 the global market of simple and traditional jewels.
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, it can lead to negative consequences
of
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 the national
hanmade
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handmade
 industry.
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, the availability of various types of
products
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 has
significant
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 impact
to
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the
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buyers. Because consumers want to have a huge variety of choices.
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, it is important to customers that have specific requirements to buy one type of
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products
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product
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 worldwide.
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, people with illnesses are able to travel globally, because they have opportunities to get the same medical
products
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 as in their own country. In conclusion, I suppose that buying identical
products
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 in different parts of our planet can make a great contribution to
development
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the development
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our
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of our
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 Earth as a whole global market of things, customers and worldwide
logistic’s
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logistics
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 chain.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • globalization
  • diversity
  • homogenization
  • cultural assimilation
  • global connection
  • local businesses
  • economic impact
  • consumerism
  • standardization
  • westernization
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