The chart below shows the total number of minutes of telephone calls in the UK , divided into three categories, from 1995 to 2002.

The chart below shows the total number of minutes of telephone calls in the UK , divided into three categories, from 1995 to 2002.
The bar graph illustrates how many minutes of telephone calls
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were done by British people based on the call types between 1995 and 2002.
Overall
,
it is clear that
calls from the local area were the most favourites among them,
although
there was a fluctuation throughout the period,
whereas
national and international and mobiles witnessed an increase.
To begin
,
local
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line
was
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started at just above 70
billion
in 1995, rising gradually to a peak of 90
billion
in 1999, and
then
dropping significantly until at around 70
billion
, which was
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similar number
with
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the beginning.
On the other hand
, national and international calling experienced
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steady growth over the period, when it had almost 35
billion
in the first year, soaring by
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half in the final year.
Moreover
, the progress of mobile
phone
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showed an upward trend until 1999, and
then
rising
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sharply to reach above 40
billion
in the following three years.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words billion with synonyms.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • telecommunications
  • landline
  • mobile phone
  • long-distance
  • international call
  • local call
  • peak
  • plateau
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • fluctuation
  • steady
  • dramatically
  • gradually
  • significantly
  • minute
  • usage
  • tariff
  • call charges
  • call volume
  • shift in preferences
  • consumer behavior
  • technological advancement
  • speculate
  • projection
  • statistical data
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