many people work long hours leaving very little time for leisure activities.does this situation have more advantages or more disadvantages
Nowadays, the vast majority of people work hard and for a long
time
, that
they have less free Correct word choice
and
time
than others. In my point of view, there is
a lot of disadvantages.Because they are damaging their health and they have less Correct subject-verb agreement
are
time
to hangout
with friends ,spend Correct your spelling
hang out
time
with your family and so on.
First of all, working for a long time
is an unhealthy thing. In addition
to this
,it gives us more wrong things like impairment of our sleepiness, deterioration of health ,strain for
our mind and a lot of other disadvantages. But Change preposition
on
also
i
recommend for people who work Change the capitalization
I
hardly
to sleep more and care about their health.
Replace the word
hard
Secondly
, majority
who Add an article
the majority
a majority
progressing
for an extended Wrong verb form
progress
time
have least
hours to dedicate Correct article usage
the least
for
their relatives, Change preposition
to
hanging
with friends . It's like all work and no play . Correct word choice
and hanging
Moreover
, it gives lower time
to relax in silence ,also
Correct word choice
and also
it
helps to think and Correct pronoun usage
apply
solving
problems or just enjoy with Change the form of the verb
solve
time
.
To sum up
, labouring for a protracted time
is unhealthy staff , besides
we've less leisure time
to enjoy , spending time
with our relatives,a
plenty of strain for our mind . Sequence leads to deterioration Remove the article
apply
for
Change preposition
of
organism
Add an article
the organism
an organism
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic
IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.
Answer structure for the type of essay
- Introduction
- Body paragraph 1 – advantages
- Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
- Conclusion
Examples to start your body paragraph:
- The main advantage is...
- The disadvantage of this...
- The main benefit...
- Despite these advantages...
- One possible drawback...