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many people work long hours leaving very little time for leisure activities.does this situation have more advantages or more disadvantages

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Nowadays, the vast majority of people work hard and for a long
time
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that
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 they have less free
time
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 than others. In my point of view, there
is
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 a lot of disadvantages.Because they are damaging their health and they have less
time
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 to
hangout
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 with friends ,spend
time
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 with your family and so on. First of all, working for a long
time
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 is an unhealthy thing.
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,it gives us more wrong things like impairment of our sleepiness, deterioration of health ,strain
for
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 our mind and a lot of other disadvantages. But
also
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i
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 recommend for people who work
hardly
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 to sleep more and care about their health.
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majority
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the majority
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 who
progressing
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 for an extended
time
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least
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 hours to dedicate
for
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 their relatives,
hanging
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and hanging
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 with friends . It's like all work and no play .
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, it gives lower
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 to relax in silence ,
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also
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it
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helps to think and
solving
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 problems or just enjoy with
time
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, labouring for a protracted
time
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 is unhealthy staff ,
besides
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 we've less leisure
time
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 to enjoy , spending
time
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 with our relatives,
a
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 plenty of strain for our mind . Sequence leads to deterioration
for
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organism
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the organism
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • work-life balance
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • stress relief
  • productivity
  • economic growth
  • career progression
  • skill enhancement
  • quality time
  • financial security
  • leisure activities
  • physical health
  • personal relationships
  • stress-related illnesses
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