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The graph below gives information about the preferred leisure activities of Australian children. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown.

The graph below gives information about the preferred leisure activities of Australian children. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown.
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The graph represents information about
preferred
Correct article usage
the preferred
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leisure
 activities of Australian depending on
girls
 and
boys
 between 5 to 14.To represent data clearly two different colours have been used so appropriately
such
 as blue and red for
boys
 and
girls
 respectively Depending on the data presented in the graph it is, a glance at more explicit Watching tv and video is the most popular
leisure
 activity among
girls
 and
boys
. And
also
 100
boys
 and
girls
 prefer them.
Although
 electronic or computer games are the second most popular
leisure
 activity among others.
Nonetheless
 when comparing the change between
girls
 and
boys
 who
interested
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are interested
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 in bike riding and electronic or computer games is almost equal. As far as the percentage of interesting art and crafts is concerned ,it is lower than all
leisure
 activities above mentioned
while
 it is higher than skateboarding and roller boarding. As a whole number of
boys
 who engaging all
the
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apply
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leisure
 activities is higher than
girls
 except for art and craft and watching tv or videos
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words leisure, girls, boys with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "represents" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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