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The two maps illustrate how the town of Langly changes between 1910 and 1950.

The two maps illustrate how the town of Langly changes between 1910 and 1950.
Overall
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, there have been several significant changes in terms of
replaced
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 and extended. One of the considerable changes in the city was the
replaced
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in
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of
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laundry
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the laundry
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. In 1910 there was laundry which was located
in
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on
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 the South Side,
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however
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,however
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this
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 laundry was replaced with
behind
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a behind
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cafe
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the cafe
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. In
this
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 period
town houses
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townhouses
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 extended
with
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to
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 flats in 1950.
Morever
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Moreover
, railway
workers
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workers'
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 cottages
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were
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demolished and developed children's play
area
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areas
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,
while
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1950
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in 1950
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 Sherman
park
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Park
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 was built
in
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on
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the
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apply
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Sherman Street.
Factory
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The factory
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 was demolished and developed into a Sherman Mensios. In 1910 there was
store
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a store
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 which was located k the north-west side,
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however
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this
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 store was replaced and extended east side
in
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of
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 the city in 1950.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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