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The given graph shows the main sources of energy for USA in 1980 and 1990

The given graph shows the main sources of energy for USA in 1980 and 1990
#sources #energy #usa
The two pie charts compare the percentage of 5 categories (
oil
, natural gas, coal, hydroelectric
power
, nuclear
power
) of
USA
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the USA
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 between 1980 and 1990. It is
noticable
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noticeable
notable
 that the percentage of
energy
 sources
oil
 and natural gas experienced a significant fall over the
10 year
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 period
while
this
 figure for coal and nuclear
power
. In 1980, 42%
an
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 average
USA
energy
sourc
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source
 went on
oil
 which was the largest
oil
of
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the chart,
however
, by 1990 the figure small for
this
categories
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category
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 had fallen by 33%.
During a
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 decade ago, the demand for natural gas
of
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USA
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US
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energy
source
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sources
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 experienced a considerable fall from 26% to 25% .
By contrast
, in terms of coal the percentage of
energy
source
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sources
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this
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 category made up 24% in 1980 and after 10 years.
This
 figure saw a sharp increase at 27% making it the largest
energy
sources
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source
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 of all. In
USA
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the USA
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, the smallest proportion of
energy
 sources belonged to nuclear
power
 in the first year,
however
next
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the next
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year
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 period, there was a 5 % rise in
this
 category.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words oil, power, usa, energy with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 3 times.
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