The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.
The pie chart illustrates the destination of Anthropology
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when they complete
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in
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particular institute. The table displays their salary in three types of employment.
Overall
, more than half of Anthropology have full-time occupations,
while
the lowest number of them have both jobs and education.
Also
, The average
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wages in private companies is less than
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places.
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more than 80 per cent of Anthropology graduates earn above 75000$ in freelance consultants and government sector occupations,
while
at just only 5% of them have salaries between 25000 and 49999.
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proportion of workers who work in private companies gets a salary between 50000 and 74999 by 35%.
According to
the pie chart,
although
the first goal of graduate students is full-time work by 52%, at just roughly 5% of them prefer to continue their
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with
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occupation.
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, part-time work and unemployed positions are the second and third destinations of them
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15% and 12% respectively.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • anthropology graduates
  • undergraduate degree
  • part-time work
  • full-time work
  • postgraduate study
  • unemployment
  • career trends
  • employment opportunities
  • flexibility
  • specialization
  • competitive job market
  • salary
  • earning potential
  • private sector
  • government sector
  • freelance work
  • public policy
  • cultural preservation
  • consulting
  • corporate anthropology
  • expertise
  • accrued
  • distribution
  • sector
  • trend
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