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TOPIC 1: Technological innovations have effected negatively. Do you agree or disagree?

#topic #innovations
In the modern world, it
easy
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 to see
technology
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 effects
to
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 human lives. As you know,
technology
have
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 there own benefits and
also
 the effects negatively to daily
lifes
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life
lives
 is the matter that
people
 have to confront.
Overall
,
the
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 modern world as now
by
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the
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technology
people
 can do more things that
people
 in the old days can’t do. By using
internet
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,
people
 can know more interesting information likes, soft skills, hard skills and
survive
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 skills,
....
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 By the way, in the negative aspect, some
people
 are dependent
to
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technology
 too much to
such
 a degree
that
is
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 they don’t contracts the
technology
 in
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 they might be uncomfortable,
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 or
to
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go crazy. There are some opinions that say,
technology
 gives us
the
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qualifies
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 and reliable information.
Technology
,
internet
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 is the pinnacle of all the things that
human
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humans
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 can
manufacturing
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.
Internet
 connected
people
 in the world together.
Technology
 and
internet
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is
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the
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 combo
can
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 help
people
 to do some
works
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,
gives
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 the required information to
works
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 faster. I agree with that.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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