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In many countries today people are choosing to have fewer children. Why is this the cause? What are the effects of this trend on the society?

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It has been claimed that at present parents mostly prefer to have small
families
. In
this
 ,essay I would extend potential reasons and the possible effects of
this
 trend. I strongly believe that many
families
 made a decision to have fewer kids because of the reason for safe funding. As you may know, today's dramatic increase in
life
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 costs causes people to keep savings.
In addition
 to that child's staff prices continue to grow every day. Another possible reason is that today's people would like to enjoy their lives and they don't want to feel uncomfortable.
This
 brings them to the decision in favour of the comfort and leisure
life
. There is no doubt that if more and more
families
 decide to have fewer children, in the future after several generations pass, there will be a considerable decrease in the world population. As a
,
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result we can say that people will start to suffer problems in creating
a
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a family
families
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families
 and expanding generations, which could bring to despairing
of
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 human beings. 
Overall
, we may conclude that the most important reason to have fewer children is the high cost of
life
 and
personality
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the personality
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 of parents that prefer to live a comfortable
life
.
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