The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010
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The chart illustrates the proportion of
men
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and women in Australia with various
age
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groups who performed consistent body activities during the year 2010
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, the total amount of
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practising physical movements of the body decreased over the different ages, I am at fluctuated among the
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bracket of women, despite
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section of
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being higher than female throughout the year 2010 The Australian
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percentage declined from 15 to 24 to 35 to 34 life clusters having values of 52.8 to 34.5 respectively. There was a steady growth from 43.1 to 46.7, considering the
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with
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45 to 54 and 65 and more respectively. In 2010, the Australian women's fraction of those who did exercise and other body movements reached 47.7 for 15 to 24 years of
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rose significantly to approximately 53 for the
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64 and below before falling to 47.1 for ladies
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aged 65 and over.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words men, age with synonyms.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Physical activity
  • Regular exercise
  • Age demographics
  • Participation rate
  • Trend analysis
  • Gender disparity
  • Health initiatives
  • Public health policies
  • Statistical comparison
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Work commitments
  • Age-related factors
  • Preventative health
  • Exercise habits
  • Surveillance data
  • Motivators and barriers
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