Improvements in health, education and trade are essential for the development of poorer nations. However, the governments of richer nations should take more responsibility for helping the poorer nations in such areas. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

In balancing the
world
economic growth, the underdevelopment of the
Third
World
Nations
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been drawn to the attention of the developed
countries
of the Western.
Thus
, governmental policies and interference in the agricultural business of the poorer
nations
were made to secure their dominant source of the economy. Many discussions among economists and politicians
also
put their focus on
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other aspects.
That is
, to improve the health, education and trade for the developing
countries
.
However
,
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improvements cannot be made by these
countries
, but more external assistance and
aids
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should be done. Because of the shortage of food supply, the people in poorer
nations
(i.e. Africa) are
esily
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easily
prone to disease, hunger and death. When natural or environmental
disastres
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disasters
happen, they
are threaten
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with their lives. Education cannot be well developed
as a result
of frequent droughts, famines and disease spreading. The other
countries
,
while
emphasising
on
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the development of agriculture in the
Third
World
, cannot really give the solution to the cyclical problem which has been existing for a long time. It is time to consider the consequences of all the waste of efforts in trying to help the economic growth of the
Third
World
and to think from
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other perspectives. The richer
countries
have the power to
rebuilt
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the
Third
World
by taking care
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essentials-health, education and trade. More
aids
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for providing
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medicine, educational needs and materials can be done by the richer
countries
. The assistance of trade and developing business in the poorer
countries
also
can be of
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great help to the poorer
nations
. If the richer
countries
can be more serious about the essential issues of how a nation develops, and well consider the special situations and circumstances those poorer
nations
are facing, the improvements will be more efficiently made. The governments of developed
countries
are, in some ways, responsible - though not obliged - for the future of those developing
countries
.
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