There are many things that can motivate people to perform well in their work. What do you feel is the best motivation to do well at work?

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own Emotions which change
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the situations which humans suffer ,Sometimes they need to be refreshed ,and sometimes to be motivated ,
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humans is to care about them and do what is essential and beneficial to them ,Controlling our feelings
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during sadness times is hard ,but in some
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we can control them perfectly
Motivation
is very important for our emotional support ،When we want to achieve a goal or do
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for our life and future ,
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for having experiences ,
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of people we love around us is a good answer to our question
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when they’re listening to our thoughts ,plans and emotions we feel
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when they say how we are valuable
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is what we need ,
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having an experienced leader will improve our positivity for achieving what we want and doing work perfectly . Not only people could help us to be motivated ,
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Music ,listening to Religious books recitation ,
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to motivational words
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youtube and other social media platforms could help us to refresh our emotions and feelings .
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which I will show the importance of ourselves
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motivating ourselves ,One
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motivation
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says that sitting alone with myself for only half an hour can help me as a motivational book could ,He says that internal
motivation
is what each of us needs ,with the presence of internal
motivation
no external things are necessary to motivate us ,Let’s try to motivate ourselves ,let’s care about us and do what gives us energy to achieve our goals .
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to you which is people we love ,leaders and guiders
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music and religious books can motivate us ,But what’s the best for motivating us is ourselves ,Is our internal
motivation
,So Here Self-love is needed .
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