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The graph gives information about the percentage of the population if four different Asian countries living in cities between 1970 and 2020 with additional predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant

The graph gives information about the percentage of the population if four different Asian countries living in cities between 1970 and 2020 with additional predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant
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The line graph
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date
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data
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 about the proportion of inhabitants who live in cities in different four Asian nations over 50 years, with projections for 2030 and 2040.
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 all the countries showed
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an increased
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increased
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of
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 the percentage of people who live
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urban areas during the given period, but
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Malaysian showed
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 significant rise. Looking
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 the graph in more detail , in 1970, the percentage of Malaysia who
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 to cities was
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 top compared to
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 countries around 32%,
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Indonesia was lowest
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 13 %. From 1980 to 2020 the proportion of people who migrate to cities in both Malaysia and Indonesia experienced
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dramatically
 want up from approximately 41% to 75 % ,
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% to 51 % respectively.
Furthermore
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percentage
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 previous
contries
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countries
 will expect to increase
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2030 and 2040, but
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Malaysia will
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 the highest increase up to 85 % and
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second will Indonesia
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 62%.
Regardnig
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Regarding
 to other countries, the
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precentage
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percentage
 of people who moved to
citites
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cities
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Philippiness
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Philippines
 from 1970 to 1990 started
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to increase
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 from 30 % and reach a peak
to
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of
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 50% and after that
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show drop
 until 2010,
then
 will projections to rise in 2030 and 2040 from around 50% to 55%.
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,
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Thailand experienced
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an increased
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increased
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 from 1970 to 1990 and that showed
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a silghtly
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silghtly
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slightly
increased
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, and
then
 will expect to increase in future to 45%.
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