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The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram illustrates the process of generating electricity by a hydroelectric power station.
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, the process of generating clean
electricity
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electrical
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 energy from
high
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a high
the high
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 level of
water
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 to
low
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a low
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 level of
water
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 is very interesting. The primary key
,
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apply
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 is a river and a dam Which open during the day to make
high
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a high
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 flow of
water
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. After that, the
water
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pass
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passes
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 through the generator through reversible turbines, creating a
low- level
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low-level
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 reservoir.
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, the generators are connected to power lines for the national grid. During
night
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the night
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, the process is reversed. The
water
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 goes from the low-level reservoir as the reversible turbines pump
water
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 to the high-level reservoir.
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, the flow of
water
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 during pumping goes through the intake which closes through
night
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the night
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.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • hydroelectric power station
  • reservoir
  • potential energy
  • mechanical energy
  • electrical energy
  • turbine
  • generator
  • renewable energy
  • fossil fuels
  • emissions
  • power lines
  • gate-controlled tunnels
  • gravity-driven
  • transformation
  • clean energy source
  • sustainable
  • recycled water
  • mountainous area
  • activate
  • transmit
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