Nowadays many young people are not interested in reading the newspapers and watching new on television. Give reasons for this and proffer solution to this problem.

At
the
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present, reading the newspapers and watching
news
on the television were ignored
from
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young
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generation. In the following paragraphs, causes and some sensible solutions for
this
issue will be outlined. It is undeniable that social media on
the
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smartphones has become an essential role in many
teenager
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,
while
the rate of reading newspapers and watching television decreased.
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, most
adolescent
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adolescents
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spend their
times
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time
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on social media roughly 80% per day.
In addition
, they can update the
news
by
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through Facebook, Instagram, and Twitter. To illustrate, the
news
will be
showed
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on their phones by opening those applications, coming from their
friends’s
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sharing or the pages they followed.
Furthermore
, these
news
are alluring
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youngster
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because of
attractive
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their attractive
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topics and
contents
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. To encourage
young
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generation
interesting
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more
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in newspapers and
television’s
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news
, the content should
be shorten
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and not difficult to understand,
including
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the vocabulary should be uncomplicated
such
as using daily life vocabulary.
Moreover
, in-trend words would attract people in
this
group.
According to
the information mentioned above, it can be concluded that
youngster
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often update the
news
on their smartphone throughout the day and it should be solved by adjusting the content and topic to be more alluring.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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