Some people prefer to plan activities for their free time very carefully. Others choose not to make any plans at all for their free time. Compare the benefits of planning free-time activities with the benefits of not making plans. Which do you prefer - planning or not planning for your leisure time?

Every
people
have to spend their free
time
but not all of them
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it wisely. Some
people
try to make a well-planned
of
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leisure
time
but
other
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others
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don't. In my opinion, planning
free-
time
activities will bring out more
benefit
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benefits
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rather than not. Planning
leisure
time
will give
people
to rethink about their
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time
and use it to reach their goals.
For instance
, the athletes want to have their own business,
therefore
, they might prepare how to
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their
free-
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free time
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time
wisely in order to build their dreams.
In addition
, planning will be good to improve
ours
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abilities to organize something.
For example
, when tourists want to go for a holiday, they have to buy
the
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ticket and hotel.
Moreover
, they have to prepare the visas and the
time
schedule during the holiday.
On the other hand
,
people
afraid have to
changed
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their plans in case their plans are failed.
Thus
, others might be disappointed to change the plan especially when they are planning with others. They have to
asked
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a
favor
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from them and rearranged it from the beginning.
Therefore
, it is better for them just
impromptu
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leisure
time
together.
Moreover
,
people
will tend to avoid
a new opportunities
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new opportunities
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available which are not aligned with their planning. For
examples
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example
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, there is
an information
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about
discount
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discounts
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for camping but they don't take that opportunity because they just decided to go to the beach that has been prepared just before the promotion came by. In conclusion, prepare the
free-
time
is easy and will bring a lot of new Despite the advantages of planning
leisure
time
, I prefer to plan
the
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leisure
time
because I can make the most out of it and
used
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my
free-
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time
wisely.
Although
others don't prepare it,
but
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I will do it.
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