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In the past, people used to get information from books. These days more and more people get it from the internet. Give reasons for your opinion and include any relevant examples.

#people #information #books #internet
There is an ever-increasing use of
technology
such
 as smartphones,tablets and laptops.
people
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 are getting
the
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information
 from the
internet
instead
 of using
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the
a
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book
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books
show examples
.It is often argued that is a positive development,whilst
other
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others
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 disagree and think it will lead to adverse ramifications.
This
 essay argues that taking
data
 from
the
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websites is more
worthy
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. The
internet
 has provided students with access to more
information
 than ever before.
Moreover
, it is a
time saving
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time-saving
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 process
as well as
easy
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an easy
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 method to get
data
.Do not need to carry large
books
 every single time if we have
phone
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a phone
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 everything present
in
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 that mobile.
In addition
, it helps to save money.Because
,
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in
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on
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 the net everything is available for free and we can download it
no
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with no
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 need to buy anything.It is
therefore
 agreed that
technology
 is a very worthwhile tool for education.Wikipedia is a primary example, where students can get any type of
information
 quickly and easily.
However
, many people disagree and feel that
technology
 deprives old culture.In earlier days people used
books
 to get
data
.But,it is hard nowadays to use
books
.Because
,
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 the cost of
books
too
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is too
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 high and we have to search the
data
 by turning the pages it is time taking process.
Moreover
,
books
 for study
requires
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require
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 a lot of effects
such
 as protecting the
books
 from
weather
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the weather
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.So, individuals prefer
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the internet
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internet
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Internet
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than
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to
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books
.
However
,
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there
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 are disadvantages
of
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to
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 using smartphones for
information
 but it outweighs the advantages. In conclusion,
while
 the benefits of
technology
, particularly the
internet
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Internet
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, allow students to tap into limitless sources of
information
,
but
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using
books
 for study purposes has more demerits than using the
internet
.
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