You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The pie charts below show the devices people in the 18 to 25 age group use to watch television in Canada in two different years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. Pie Chart
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two pie charts show data about a group Correct your spelling
The
age
between 18 to 25 years old, and how they consumed Replace the word
aged
tv
programs with different appliances during the period of 2009 to 2019 in Canada.
Overall
, there is a drastic decrease in conventional TV
users over 10-years
. Correct your spelling
10 years
Instead
, percentage
of mobile phone, flat-screen Correct article usage
the percentage
TV
and desktop computer users have taken over the most of usage in second
chart.
In detail, the least popular device used by young adults in Canada in the year 2009, was Change the article
the second
tablet
, with 5% of the total amount. Add an article
a tablet
the tablet
However
in Add a comma
,However
second
chart of 2019, Change the article
the second
this
percentage
increased to 19%. Also
other devices like mobile Add a comma
,Also
phone
and flat-screen Fix the agreement mistake
phones
TV
consumers' percentage
both increased over a decade, from 8% to 27%, and from 15% to 26% respectively. As can be observe
from these two charts, young people's interest in desktop Change the verb form
be observed
computer
and Laptop devices to watch Fix the agreement mistake
computers
TV
programs have dropped slightly after 10-years
.
Correct your spelling
10 years
Besides
that
we can Add a comma
,that
also
see how the use of conventional TV
percentage
dropped from 34% to 4% after a decade of interval.Submitted by dewintaputri23 on
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tv, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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