The pie charts below show the devices people in the 18 to 25 age group use to watch television in Canada in two different years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Pie Chart

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between 18 to 25 years old, and how they consumed

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programs with different appliances during the period of 2009 to 2019 in Canada.

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, there is a drastic decrease in conventional

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of mobile phone, flat-screen

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chart. In detail, the least popular device used by young adults in Canada in the year 2009, was

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, with 5% of the total amount.

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chart of 2019,

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increased to 19%.

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other devices like mobile

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both increased over a decade, from 8% to 27%, and from 15% to 26% respectively. As can

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from these two charts, young people's interest in desktop

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dropped from 34% to 4% after a decade of interval.

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