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Many think that all decisions within a company should be made by managers whereas others feel it is better to include employees in the process. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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While
 some individuals believe that a manager should be a person in charge of
decision
-making in a company.
Conversely
, there are those people who believe that
employees
 should be involved in the
decision
.
This
 essay will elaborate on both points of view
along with
 my perspective which I personally believe that
decision
-maker depends on the severity of
issues
 .
To begin
 with, it is understandable for some to believe that every
decision
 should decide by
managers
.
This
 is probably because
managers
 are someone who is seniority and has numerous experiences and knowledge in a company.
Therefore
,
decisions
 made by
managers
 are already passed through his consideration based on their previous experiences which might be more valid than some who lack experience.
Although
 all
decisions
 are not always valid,
managers
 are able to support and responsible for results.
On the other hand
,
employees
 should make
decisions
 by themselves as it is much faster than waiting for
managers
'
decisions
. Since many companies have several levels of hierarchy, it is a waste of time to wait for the
decision
.
For example
, in the Thailand government officer, if some officers required a
decision
 from their supervisor, a letter should be written, and
then
 send to supervisors which is required to pass through various processes before the letter has arrived.
Moreover
, since
managers
 work at a very high level, they might not have the same understanding of the issue as
employees
 do leading to wrong
decision
-making. In a nutshell, I strongly believe that
employees
 should evaluate the priority of a topic first whether it is important
decisions
 or solely small
issues
. If they are small
issues
,
employees
 are able to decide on solutions by themselves.
However
, if they are important
issues
,
managers
 should be
responsible
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 person for a
decision
 or have a mutual agreement among the team.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Centralized authority
  • Top-down approach
  • Autocratic leadership
  • Managerial hierarchy
  • Operational efficiency
  • Accountability
  • Competence
  • Employee empowerment
  • Participative decision-making
  • Workplace democracy
  • Morale
  • Consensus
  • Bottom-up approach
  • Cross-functional collaboration
  • Organizational culture
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