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Some People Think It Is Better For A Country’s Economy For People To Spend Money While Others Believe It Would Be Better For People To Save Money Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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The betterment of spend and saving cash is a topical debate.
While
 the majority of society reckons that spending money would help the Country's finance, others think that saving is a better choice. I will discuss both perspectives in subsequent paragraphs. On the one hand, there are many reasons why people opine that having a deposit is better, rather than splurging it. First and foremost, people are inclined to save money in order to their brighter future.
For example
, because pursuing higher education requires much payment, they choose to not spend their penny.
Not to mention
 that unforeseen circumstances
such
 as health problems need much more expenditure.
For instance
, when people get older many severe diseases are coming.
Hence
, they should save for their pension time.
On the other hand
, governments suggest their citizens to not keep their savings in order to circulate cash. It is very important for the economic nation. Taking the pandemic outbreak as an example in 2020, in Indonesia, many communities stayed at home and rarely did they purchase goods.
Consequently
, economic circulation stuck and it prophesied experiencing a recession.
Therefore
, politician opine is that better to use the payment to help the country out of the economic crisis. Against
this
 backdrop, I opine that spending cash wisely by savings is a good choice to prevent unforeseen problems ahead
while
 outlaying money without stopping contributes nation's economy
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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