Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

An individual who strives to make an impact
to
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a global problem
,
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would very likely fail as their efforts are nothing but grains of sand.
On the other hand
,
governments
and large
companies
will always make a difference. What
criterias
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criteria
do
people
have to
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in the first place in order to improve the
environment
? They would need a strong and unmoving will to commit to
such
acts. And
power
, as in
this
modern world
its
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what gives
people
the
rights
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to do certain actions. Given that big
companies
are able to influence various aspects of our lives, it is safe to assume that only big
companies
and
governments
can make a difference. As mere
individuals
with no
power
in hand can do next to nothing to
change
something.
Governments
and big
companies
if willing to
change
the
environment
for the better, will do a decent job doing so. As they have
such
influence over the public and
immesurable
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immeasurable
wealth to perform any solution, even the most costly ones, to improve the
environment
. Whilst
individuals
can only rely on themselves spreading the word of mouth and
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small actions to pressure the parties with higher authorities to take action. Sadly, despite the overwhelming
power
that big
companies
and the government have over their country, it is tricky to say that they will do anything at all to cause a difference to the
environment
.
As unfortunately
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, they are blinded by greed seeing the
short term
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financial benefits that destroying the
environment
gives, but not the
long term
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benefits
given
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when sustaining the
environment
. But with the rising number of
individuals
gaining knowledge about
this
worldwide problem, more and more
people
are starting to fight back and raise their voices for our
environment
. Over a short span of time, we are expected to see an accumulation of
individuals
standing up for the
environment
which could go up to numbers exceeding millions and hundreds of millions of
people
, which in turn could effectively pressure the
governments
and big
companies
to lift their fingers and act. In short,
while
it is obvious that big
companies
and the government have the
power
to
change
the world for the better place, but did not do so. It is up to the
individuals
to stay together and become an unmoving force, persuading the big
companies
and the government to
change
the
environment
for the better, helping humanity to have a sustainable future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental awareness
  • sustainable practices
  • renewable energy
  • carbon footprint
  • waste reduction
  • conservation
  • ecosystem
  • pollution
  • climate change
  • responsibility
  • leadership
  • legislation
  • investment
  • collaboration
  • systemic change
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