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Nowaday, more and more people commit crimes. What are causes and solutions?

#nowaday #people #crimes
Nowaday
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Nowadays
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, more and more
people
 commit
crimes
 and
trend
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the trend
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 is increasing every
days
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day
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. Mainly factor is
people
not
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do not
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enough
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have enough
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of
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apply
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income and
necessery
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necessary
 for use in daily their life.
Hence
,
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the grovenment
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grovenment
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government
governments
 must support important items or budget to help them.
Firstly
, if we
deep
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 investigate the root cause of issues. crime
happend
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happened
happens
 when
people
 need to survive without any
their
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of their
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resorce
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resources
.
Therefor
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Therefore
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 they may
decided
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decide
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 to
illegal
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do illegal
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 and make
wrong
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a wrong
the wrong
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thing
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things
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 to get food or value items
then
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and then
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sold
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sell
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 them for money.
Moreover
country
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the country
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 will not
interenting
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interesting
for
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in
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tourisum
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tourism
 and long-term living for
forgien
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foreign
 because if
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the crimes
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crimes
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crime
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 rate
index
 is very high. And
also
 impact
to
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apply
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lower
country
 income for
long-term
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the long-term
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 future.
Secondary
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Second
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,
is
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it
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 explain
about
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apply
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problem solving
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problem-solving
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solution
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solutions
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 to reduce
crimes
 in our
country
. So
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the govenment
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govenment
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government
 must
intensive
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intensively
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and
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apply
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prioritize
this
 issue to
first
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the first
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ier
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tier
 issue and
fastest
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the fastest
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 fix.
Also
 as
i
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I
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 mention
people
 commit
crimes
 because they want
of
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to
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 survive their life. So
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the govenment
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govenment
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government
 must action and get
people
satisfy
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satisfied
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 with
present
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the present
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 family condition.
Additional
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 when
people
 satisfy with their life that affect to
crimes
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crime
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index
 ratio
decreasing
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decreases
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.
Morever
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Moreover
tourisum
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tourism
 and
trallvel
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travel
 number increase and boot economy. In
sammarize
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summarize
,
govenment
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government
 should fast action by spend money and provide
necessery
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necessary
 to
people
 and make them satisfy for
current
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a current
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 condition.
That is
best
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the best
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 way to reduce
crime
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the crime
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index
 rate
for
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in
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 our
country
.
Lastest
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The lastest
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 thing
i
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I
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 hope our
country
growing
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grows
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 without crime. So
country
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the country
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 will
increasing
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increase
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safety
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the safety
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index
 on
online
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the online
an online
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 official
report
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reports
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.
Then
 many
of
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apply
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employer
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employers
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 may
interest
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be interest
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 to build
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a manufacture
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manufacture
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manufacturing
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 base in the future.
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