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It is right that university graduates earn more money than less well-educated people and for this reason some people believe university students should pay the full cost of their education. Others, however argue that higher education should be provide for free by the government. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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It is a fact that graduated
students
 earn higher salaries than non-educated people.
Therefore
, some individuals believe that
students
 should be responsible for paying the
tuition
fees
 themselves,
while
 there are those people who believe that these
fees
 should be paid by the
government
.
This
 essay will elaborate on both points of view
along with
 my perspective.
To begin
 with, it is understandable for some to believe that
university
students
 should pay
tuition
 by themselves.
This
 is probably because
students
 will pay more attention in class as the fee are paid by their parents.
For example
, I studied at Chulalongkorn
University
 in an international program, and the fee is around 100,000 THB per semester, I always pay attention in class, and try my best to perform well in all activities since I want to be worth the
tuition
fees
 which my parent paid.
On the other hand
, covering all the education
fees
 for all
university
students
 is a
government
 burden as some
students
 may not intend to study in a
university
 but attend because all courses are free.
Therefore
, supporting all higher education
fees
 might waste much amount of money,
whereas
 there are other crucial issues,
for example
, poverty, and economic inequality which required support from the
government
. In a nutshell, I strongly believe that each student should pay their own
university
's
tuition
fees
however
, the
government
 should have a policy to support some scholarships to
students
 who are interested in attending
university
 but lack money.
This
 is to ensure that all
students
 are able to study effectively.
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