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in some countries, it is now possible for people to buy products made in other countries. to what extent do the benefits of this development outweigh the drawbacks?

#countries #people #products #development
A popular belief is that
,
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 having
flexible
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 and
secure
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 has been considered as an essential thing for human activities
such
 as
increase
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 productivity and
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 faster.
In addition
 to that, well-qualified people who consider
technology
development
 could gain
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plenty of options rather than use
the
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manual payment, because individuals can follow the modern era to use cutting-edge technologies as important elements to get
the
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high quality
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of
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product
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 and convenience usage. Even though directing
use
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 of
technology
 has difficulties and failures to manage, organise, or utilize,
technology
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the technology
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 of importing
product
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products
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 has a huge opportunity to obtain a better result. example, if citizens focus on
technology
 growth to attract
the
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productivity, they will earn more
revenues
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revenue
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 and
incomes
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income
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.
As a result
, focusing on
technology
 could incline the
amount
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 of sophisticated transactions not only for today but
also
 for
coming
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 days.
On the other hand
, there are several issues or problems, to develop and evolve the
technology
 to become crucial and famous in society’s view by having low economy and unemployment. First thing
first,
having terrible
obstacle
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 in
technology
 research could obtain and increase
cost
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 of
development
,
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 because several inhabitants have
wish
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 and hope about
easiness
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the easiness
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 of getting money.
Moreover
, having unemployment and
low
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 economy could become negative impacts or consequences, because society will not agree, support, and advocate
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 high level of
improting
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importing
 and exporting.
Although
technology
development
have
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 an ideal opportunity to become potential incomes,
these
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this technology
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technology
 of export and import could not be
implementative
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implementation
 and acceptable, because import or export can make people reduce their incomes.
For instance
, if several societies understand and comprehend
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the
technology
 impact, they will appreciate the meaning of
development
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technology
 to avoid feeling hesitant in society.
Therefore
, technologies have been assumed as good elements for societies to know and admit the opportunity of export and import in many years to come.
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