The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The two bar charts compare and contrast the data on what kind of work both UK graduate and postgraduate
students
choose to do after leaving the university, excluding full-time jobs in 2008. The majority of UK graduates choose to continue studying
instead
of working.
Similarly
, the same happens in the path of the UK postgraduates as well. Meanwhile, voluntary work is the least favourite among both groups of
students
. In 2008, both graduate and postgraduate
students
were going for
further
study, accounting for 29,665 and 2,725
students
respectively.
However
, there is a big difference between
further
study and voluntary work as the number of
students
who chose
this
path was considerably low, with 3,500 graduates and 345 postgraduate
students
.
On the other hand
, the number of graduate
students
who worked part-time and were unemployed in 2008 showed a slight difference between the numbers which accounted for 17,735
in
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part-time and 16,235 in unemployment.
Also
, the number of graduates who were unemployed was almost ten times greater than postgraduate
students
in 2008.
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