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The diagrams below show the life cycle of a lady bird and its anatomy.

The diagrams below show the life cycle of a lady bird and its anatomy.
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The left provided diagram illustrates the various
stage
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 of
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lady
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the lady
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bug
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's life cycle,
while
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 the second diagram describes the
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lady
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ladybug
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bug
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 body's components.
Overall
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, they are 4
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stage
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stages
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 of
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lady
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ladybug
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bug
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 life, which include eggs, larval, pupa, and adult
syages
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stages
. For the anatomy, they are 8 body parts of
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lady
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ladybug
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bug
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.
To begin
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 with, after
the
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apply
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fertilization, an adult
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lady
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ladybug
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bug
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 will lay its eggs on the
leave
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left
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. After 2-5 days, the egg will turn into the larval
stage
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 continuing for 21 days.
Then
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, it turns into
pupa
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a pupa
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stage
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 lying on the leaf, and
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finally
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,finally
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 after a
week
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,week
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 it turns into an adult
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lady
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ladybug
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bug
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. The second picture depicts the anatomy of a ladybird, which consists of a head at the front, sticking with two antennas
each
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on each
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 side of the head next to two eyes.
Furthermore
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, behind a
head
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,head
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 there is a structure
call
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called
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 pronotum.
Moreover
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, there
are
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is
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total
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a total
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 of 6 legs attached
with
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to
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 its body, three on each side.
In addition
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 to
this
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, both red
elytras
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elytra
 with
black
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a black
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spot
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spots
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 at the surface and wings
are stick
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are stuck
are sticking
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with
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to
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 the abdomen part.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words stage, lady, bug with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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