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In many countries women are allowed to take maternity leave from their jobs during the first few months after the birth of their baby. Do advantages outweigh disadvantages?

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In recent days, the topic of
women
 taking several
months
 of
maternity
 leave after giving birth has sparked heated discussions in society. Some people believe that they do not need to take longer
maternity
 leave,
while
 others hold the opposite view. In my opinion, the advantages of
women
 taking a few
months
 of
maternity
 leave outweigh the disadvantages. On the one hand,
women
 can take
maternity
 leave during the first few
months
 after the baby is born, which is a critical time for breastfeeding and for
women
 to recover physically. After their
maternity
 leave is over, the chances of them not being able to go to
work
due to
 physical discomfort are reduced, and it can
also
 lead to higher self-confidence and job satisfaction.
In addition
,
women
 taking longer
maternity
 leave can help them take care of their
babies
, which will
also
 help the
babies
 grow up healthily, and allow husbands to focus on their
work
.
Women
 who go to
work
 with only a short break after giving birth can experience health problems, which can prevent the healthy development of
babies
.
Women
 who worry about their
babies
 at
work
 can
also
 suffer from reduced productivity and output.
On the other hand
,
women
's extended
maternity
 leave results in them being away from
work
 for extended periods of time, which can disconnect them from the company's operations. When they return, they do not perform well, which affects the company's output.
In addition
, taking long
maternity
 leave and not returning to
work
 will make employers think more about hiring
women
, which may increase the problem of sexism in the workplace.
Overall
, I think the benefits for
women
 of taking
maternity
 leave for the first few
months
 of a baby outweigh the risks.
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