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The gap between rich and poor is becoming wider, the rich richer, the poor even poorer. What was caused this problem and how to solve this problem?

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With the progress of time, there are more and more methods and ways to make
money
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, and the Matthew effect is becoming more and more obvious. As long as people with smart minds have little success, they will have a cumulative advantage, giving them greater opportunities to achieve even more outstanding achievements.
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 one of the reasons for the
gap
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 between the rich and the poor. On the one hand, the government tax policies in many contemporary countries are not good. The taxation of the poor and the rich is not much different. The relatively high taxation of the rich is not a threat to their own property, so the rich have a lot of
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 for business. Investment and financial management,
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 the poor have no
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 to change themselves, they can only maintain their own food and clothing.
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 makes the poor poorer and the rich richer.
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, as society continues to progress, technology continues to develop. The rich have far more opportunities to receive education than the poor. The rich have technology at their fingertips to make
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, so as to obtain the latest information on the market,
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 the poor have no access to information and cannot keep up with the latest developments. They often make wrong judgments that affect their own development.
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 is one of the reasons for the large
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 between rich and poor. The primary responsibility for addressing the poverty
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 should rest with governments. First of all, the government should legislate to amend the tax policy so that the rich pay more taxes and raise the tax threshold so that the poor pay less and the rich pay more.
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, the government should provide preferential policies for the poor, allocate funds and professionals to support the poor in rural areas and work towards making the poor gradually become more financially stable, which can help reduce the poverty
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