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Some people think that all teenagers should be required to do unpaid work in their free time to help the local community. They believe this would benefit both the individual teenager and society as a whole. Do you agree or disagree?

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Many
teenagers
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 take part in volunteer
work
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 nowadays, whether it be out of kindness or to have something for their resumé.
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, the concept of imposing unpaid
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 on them to benefit the local community raises issues regarding ethics and perhaps even the law.
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, I wholeheartedly disagree with it. It is integral that we consider
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 issue in a more ethical manner.
Teenagers
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, as they stand, are already making a considerable impact on our society through academics alone. It would simply be outrageous to add onto their responsibilities and require them to balance both
work
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 and school, let alone unpaid
work
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. As
teenagers
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, they have the right to experience everything their youth has to offer— spending time with friends, finding hobbies, doing fun activities, and so on. Studying already takes up enough of their time. But of course, there are legal factors that come into play as well.
Teenagers
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 are, by definition, people aged between 13-19 years.
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, most
teenagers
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 would be considered minors. In turn, under the eyes of the law, that may make forcing
teenagers
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 to
work
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 equivalent to child
labor
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labour
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 in most cases.
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, I absolutely disagree with requiring
teenagers
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 to do unpaid
work
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 to benefit the local community. In fact, I dare say that it is blatant exploitation of
teenagers
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. Motivating young people to do volunteer
work
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 and contribute to the local community is always good, but never turn that hard
work
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 into an obligation. Good deeds should come from the heart, not requirements.
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