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National costume or traditional wears of a particular country are an important part of the culture of that country, but with globalisation of cultures and other exchanges taking place, now they seem to be losing importance. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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India is diversity country, Here living
people
 from different cultures, Domestic clothes or cultural apparel
wearing
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of
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 a particular nation is a crucial part of the
culture
 of that state, But with the globalisation of traditions and other trading taking place and losing our nation's emotions and beliefs. I agree with
this
 notion so will discuss it in detail.
To begin
 with,
This
 is the modern era
people
 are following
western
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culture
 and
day
 by
day
attract
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 and obsessed with the foreign
culture
 they lost behind the moral values of our
culture
 and tradition.
Moreover
, youngsters are following social media and are very obsessed with it, So they saw their
culture
 and watch Hollywood
culture
 in movies their
culture
very
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 bad effects on Indian
people
 without knowing about the side effects they follow their
culture
. But when South Indian
people
 did not follow other getups because they respect their
culture
as well as
 they were going anywhere they always wore lungi and kurta and women wear sarees.
Additionally
, In
this
 fast ,life
people
 think very
advance
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 and live modern
lifestyle
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lifestyles
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 especially in Delhi, Mumbai, Goa and West Bengals Individuals wear mostly Western clothes,
Although
, many companies allow in their offices only formal uniforms
such
 as pants and shirts for both
gender
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.
Nevertheless
, Citizens lost the moral values of their
culture
 they did not care about
that is
 a very bad effect on the globalisation of cultural emotions and beliefs. But, If I talk about the Muslim community they follow their god's rule they wear pathani suits and their women wear a burkha when they were going anywhere. Because Some
people
 think that, Rape
case
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 increasing in the nation
day
 by
day
 there is
the
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a
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 reason that women wear short clothes. In conclusion, globalisation is affected by Western cultures so
people
 get preference
their
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for their
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 own
culture
 and they get the value of morals, emotions, beliefs, and region. So that we did not lose our
culture
.
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