The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The illustration sketches out how the bricks are produced for use in the construction of buildings.
Overall
, the manufacturing process contains seven distinctive steps,
moreover
,
this
material is made of clay,sand and water utilising modern
equipments
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equipment
types of equipment
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and technologies.
To begin
with, a digger excavates clay, and gathered substances go through
metal
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a metal
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grid, so small pieces fall onto the roller underneath. Afterwards, they are mixed with sand and water, and
this
mixture is either cut by a wire cutter or shaped by a mould, and eventually, the manufacture
od
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bricks seems to be finished. Following that, blocks of the completed product are dried for 1-2 days,
thereafter
, before cooling in a chamber, they are heated in two consecutive kilns: the first one's temperature is between 200 and 980 degrees Celcius,
while
the second one works at 870-1300 degrees.
Consequently
, once small blocks are packed into huge ones, they are delivered to the building companies by tracks.
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