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Some people think that the best way to reduce crime is to give longer sentences. Others, however, believe there are better alternativeways of reducing crime. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Crime
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 is a serious and growing problem in most societies.
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 many people believe that the best way to tackle
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 matter is to place
criminals
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 in
prison
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 for longer, other people disagree. In
this
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 essay, I will discuss both views and outline why I believe that longer sentences
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 the best measure to reduce
crime
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. Some people argue that leaving
criminals
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 in
prison
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 for a long
time
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 means that they will be mixed with other
criminals
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 and
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 causes negative impacts to improve their character.
In addition
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, some believe one
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 the alternative ways to reduce
crime
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 is community service,
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 as volunteer work.
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 gives an offender the
opportunities
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 to give something positive back to society, and so it may improve
thier
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their
 character for
thier
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their
 better future.
The others
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Others
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 believe the view that there are benefits
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 giving offenders longer
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 sentences. One reason for
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 is spending a long
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 in
prison
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 provides an opportunity for the
prison
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 services to rehabilitate
criminals
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.
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,
criminals
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 who
has
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 committed a serious offence,
such
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 as murder or violent offence need a long
time
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 in
prison
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 not only to reflect
what
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 they have
realy
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really
 done but
also
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 to ensure they can be re-educated and not to re-offend. In conclusion,
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 I discussed both views, I strongly agree with the view that placing
criminals
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 in
prison
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 is the best measure to reduce
crime
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. There may be other
way
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ways
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 to re-educate and rehabilitate
criminals
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,
however
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, they should
be commit
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 the crimes they have
occured
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occurred
 and must pay for it no matter what as being in
prison
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 for a long
time
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. So that they will not re-offend.
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