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In some countries, most people prefer to rent their homes rather then buying them. What are the advantages and disadvantages of renting a home?

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It is
ture
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true
 that in some countries, many people decide that renting their home is preferable to buying it. In
this
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positive
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 and negative impacts of renting a property. The main benefit of renting a
house
 , rather than buying one is
because
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that
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enable
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to
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one to
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 move at
anytime
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 when it is necessary.
For instance
, when a bigger place is required as children are growing up, not owning a
house
 makes the situation easier. In
addithion
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addition
, when one
decide
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 to relocate for better opportunities on
ones
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one's
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 job, renting a property
contribute
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contributes
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 to
move
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 simply and
speedy
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 without any consideration.
Cleary
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, being able to move is a key advantage of renting.
However
, advantages always
comes
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 with
disadvabtages
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disadvantages
. One of the major
resons
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reasons
of
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for
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 renting a home is paying the amount of money continuously without being able to own a
house
.
This
 could be a huge waste
in
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 your life. Another negative impact of renting is you are not eligible for re-decorating or renovating.
This
 reduces not only your satisfaction but
also
 your motivation and
affect
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on
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apply
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your mood. In conclusion,
Although
 I discussed
that
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 advantages and disadvantages of renting homes, I believe that renting provides
more
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greater flexibility
while
 owning has
greater
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a greater
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reward
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rewards
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. In my opinion, I prefer to rent a
house
 so that I can achieve a more flexible lifestyle.
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