Some people think that not only should professional sports and cultural enterprises be sponsored by the government but also that amateur adult and children groups should get funding. Do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to support your position.

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Sports

and

culture

are the two

factor

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which represent the

country

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soft image to the world. It has been noted that government and enterprises are mainly sponsored the adult team and big

culture

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events.

While

amateur

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and

childrens

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haven’t got any financial support. I

am completely agree

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with the statement to provide financial

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to the amateur group.

Firstly

, when we talk about

sports

, it has been observed that in the world major preference in

term

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of finance

given

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the

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adults

teams

. Many brands and other big giant companies

collaborates

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with prominent

sports

teams

and players. They sponsor them because it

help

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them in creating their brand value.

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this

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sponsorships

not

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provide any kind of

values

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to the community because these

teams

are already established and players are already trained.

While

amateur

teams

needs

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financial

assistant

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because these

teams

are on a basic

level

and their players

needs

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aids

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to develop their skills.

Moreover

culture

includes arts,

musics

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music

kinds of music

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, dramas, and many more. In cultural promotion enterprise takes

keen

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interest. In

past

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it has been that many companies sponsored big shows.

For instance

coke company in Pakistan sponsored Coke Studio shows to promote music and the most amazing thing happening is they gave

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to many those

artist

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who are not well-known in public but

this

is the only

one

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apply

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example in Pakistan,

who

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supports junior

artist

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, on

government

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level

administration did not initiate any kind of support program for

cultural

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and

sports

. In conclusion,

sports

and

culture

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cultural

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activities on a junior

level

get some

supports

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enterprises.

this

trend is on

initial

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level

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, from

government

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the government

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side

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this

process is delayed which results in wasting talent.

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The global demand for oil and gas is increasing. Some believe that we should therefore encourage the exploitation of remote areas. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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