Some people think that not only should professional sports and cultural enterprises be sponsored by the government but also that amateur adult and children groups should get funding. Do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to support your position.

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Sports

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and

culture

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are the two

factor

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factors

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which represent the

country

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soft image to the world. It has been noted that government and enterprises are mainly sponsored the adult team and big

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culture

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cultural

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events.

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amateur

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amateurs

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and

childrens

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children

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haven’t got any financial support. I

am completely agree

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with the statement to provide financial

assistant

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to the amateur group.

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, when we talk about

sports

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, it has been observed that in the world major preference in

term

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of finance

given

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is given

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the

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apply

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adults

teams

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. Many brands and other big giant companies

collaborates

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with prominent

sports

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teams

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and players. They sponsor them because it

help

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them in creating their brand value.

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this

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these

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sponsorships

not

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do not

did not

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provide any kind of

values

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value

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to the community because these

teams

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are already established and players are already trained.

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amateur

teams

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needs

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financial

assistant

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assistance

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because these

teams

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are on a basic

level

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and their players

needs

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aids

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to develop their skills.

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culture

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includes arts,

musics

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music

kinds of music

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, dramas, and many more. In cultural promotion enterprise takes

keen

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interest. In

past

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it has been that many companies sponsored big shows.

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coke company in Pakistan sponsored Coke Studio shows to promote music and the most amazing thing happening is they gave

chance

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a chance

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to many those

artist

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who are not well-known in public but

this

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is the only

one

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apply

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example in Pakistan,

who

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that

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supports junior

artist

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artists

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, on

government

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the government

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level

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administration did not initiate any kind of support program for

cultural

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culture

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and

sports

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. In conclusion,

sports

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and

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culture

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cultural

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activities on a junior

level

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get some

supports

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support

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from

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enterprises.

this

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trend is on

initial

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level

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In contrast

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, from

government

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the government

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side

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this

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process is delayed which results in wasting talent.

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for example
for instance
to illustrate this
to give a clear example
such as
namely
to illustrate
take, for example

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

280 words

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Some people think that not only should professional sports and cultural enterprises be sponsored by the government but also that amateur adult and children groups should get funding. Do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to support your position.

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