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Band 5.5

Large companies should pay higher salaries to CEOs and executives compared to other workers. To what extent do you agree or disagree? (Write 250 words.)

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At present, opinions are divided as to whether CEOs and
executives
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 should have higher
salaries
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 than other
workers
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 or not. Despite the fact that some
workers
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work
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 harder than
executives
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, I believe that
executive
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 levels need higher
skill
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 and experience so they deserve a higher salary. On the one hand, there are many reasons why
workers
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 should have similar or higher
salaries
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 than the chairmans. First of All, several
workers
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work
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 harder than the
executives
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. If you compare working hours or
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 number of tasks that they did, some
workers
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work
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 more than the
executives
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 so their
salaries
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 should be higher than the
executives
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.
Secondly
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, some
workers
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 have a higher
skill
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 than some chairmans, they deserve a higher salary than the
executive
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 or at least both of them should have similar
salaries
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.
On the other hand
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, Most of
chairman’s
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 jobs need higher skills and experiences than general employees. Some of their jobs need advanced skills that only a minority of people can do
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 as the CTOs should have an advanced technical
skill
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 that can help when the business is faced with a hard technical issue.
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, an
executive
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's decision dramatically affects the business so
this
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 is why their experience is really important. If they make a wrong decision, it may result in a bad situation for a business so only a higher
skill
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 is not enough to be the
executive
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. In conclusion ,
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 some people think that
workers
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 deserve higher
salary
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salaries
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 than
executives
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 since they
work
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 harder, I believe that
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executive’s
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 jobs need higher skills and
experiences
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experience
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 so they deserve higher
salaries
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 than general employees.

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You present a balanced view by addressing both sides of the argument, which is a key aspect of effective essay writing.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your use of topic sentences helps guide the reader through your points, which enhances overall clarity.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • executive compensation
  • income disparity
  • corporate governance
  • incentive structures
  • ethical considerations
  • competitive advantage
  • demotivation
  • pay structures
  • social inequality
  • talent acquisition
  • company culture
  • economic impact
  • leadership roles
  • employee morale
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