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Study show that criminals have a low level of education. For this reason some people believe that the best way to reduce crime is to educate people in prison, so they can get a job when they leave prison. Do you agree or diagree?

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Some people believe that education is necessary to reduce crime after the prisoner is released. The
criminals
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 will have a new opportunity to find a
job
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instead
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 of doing crime again. In my point of view, I agree that prisoner has to be given a second chance to improve their life quality by practical
knowledge
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. The motif of crime is usually about the economy,
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, how to increase their income and give their families needed.
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, the government do not give better
job
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 vacancy and free education for its citizen.
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, the number of
criminals
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 is related to the nation’s social welfare.
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, In Indonesia, there is many kidnapping since many workers are fired by companies because of covid pandemic.
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, through practical
knowledge
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,
criminals
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 might have a different point of view and new abilities to find a
job
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.
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, during the prisoner, they might learn new
knowledge
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 to sew clothes and repair shoes
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 of just having the same previous abilities
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 as being an illegal parking man who is
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 a kidnapper.
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, technology is shifting rapidly, so it is inevitable that some jobs will not exist anymore and a new opportunity is opened.
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, the country will have an extra worker from the prison with a new set of skills
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 the industries needed.
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, by giving a new set of
knowledge
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, the
criminals
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 might be able to live properly and have varied skills to find another
job
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 when they leave prison.

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