You have just enrolled in a 12 week English class, but have found that you have a family problem and you will have to return home. Write to the school. In your letter 􀁸 Explain what has happened 􀁸 Request a refund 􀁸 Ask whether you will be able to return at a later date

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to chancel a 12 weeks English class that I

have

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just enrolled

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last

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in last

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week

due to

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a family issue. My name is Keiko and I

have

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signed up for an English class for 12 weeks

last

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Thursday.

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I was very excited

for

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this

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new

challenging

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, I

have

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found a family issue yesterday, unfortunately. I heard from my parents

last

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night and they told me that my father is going to be hospitalised next Thursday and going to have an operation the following week.

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, I have decided to go back to Japan for a

while

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to support my family. Because of

this

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situation, I would like to request a full refund for the course as I need to organise my flight ticket to return home. I am aware

this

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is very inconvenient for you but If you could start processing my request as soon as possible, I would really

appriciate

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appreciate

it.

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I am not sure

that

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when exactly I am coming back to

Austlalia

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Australia

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point, is it possible to

enroll

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the

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same class a few months later? I am very interested in

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course and would love to study at your school again. Thank you very much in advance for your consideration and look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully, Keiko Okada

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

225 words

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You have just enrolled in a 12 week English class, but have found that you have a family problem and you will have to return home. Write to the school. In your letter 􀁸 Explain what has happened 􀁸 Request a refund 􀁸 Ask whether you will be able to return at a later date

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Due to poorer countries experiecing a 'brain drain' they are seeing many professionals, such as doctors and teachers, leaving to work in more developed countries. What problems does this cause? What solutions can be suggested to deal with these situations?

In some countries student pay their fees by themselves but in some countries it has been paid by government