The given pie charts compare the varian types of energy power in French families over the course of a decade.

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The given pie charts compare the

varian

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various

types of

energy

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power in French families over the course of a decade. It can be seen that the figure witnessed an upward trend in all

energy

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while

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opposite was true for Petro.

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, coal power dominated the production of

energy

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over the period of time and despite the growth in other powers, it was still the minority of categories.

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with, there

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no considerable differences between the percentage in 1995 for coal, gas and

petro

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petrol

, at 29.8%, 29.63%and 29,27%, respectively.

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, unidentified

energy

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types accounted for

meager

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proportions in the 1995 figure. Moving on to the second chart, as far as 2005

concerned

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while

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nuclear power showed a growing pattern to 10.10%, the proportion of gas was three times higher than nuclear, with 30.31% in turn.

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, coal remained unchanged over the period of time and

petro

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Petro

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witnessed a downward trend decreasing to 19.55%.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

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157 words

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The given pie charts compare the varian types of energy power in French families over the course of a decade.

Some people believe that the government is wasting money on the arts and that this money should be invested better in other areas. To what extent do you agree with this view?

Since the beginning of the 20th century, the number of endangered species has increased significantly and we have witnessed more mass extinctions in this period than in any other period of time. What problems arise from this and how can they be tackled?