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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outwiegh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, learning different languages is very beneficial and helpful.
According to
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 experts children should start learning foreign languages in primary
school
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 rather than secondary
school
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. We shall discuss both the advantages and disadvantages in the upcoming paragraphs.
To begin
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 with, primary
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 is where children start to learn and adapt
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real world
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 knowledge. They grab things easily as their cognitive and
itellectual
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intellectual
 skills are developing. It will become
their
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apply
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part of life which will be helpful for them in future. In
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multi-linguil
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multi-lingual
 world
everyday
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 we hear people talking in different languages. So, when children will
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 up they can make new friends easily. Every cloud has
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 lining, so there are
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 some disadvantages. Teaching kids
foreign
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a foreign
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 language can add one more extra subject to their syllabus and there will be
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a lot
 of pressure on them. In secondary
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 they have
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a lot
 to focus on so, they might not be able to
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concentrate
 on all the different subjects at
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 time. It will be
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 for them,
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 they can get stressed and
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 in
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 will affect their
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overall
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 grades.
To conclude
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, considering both pros and cons,
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the advantages
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 outweigh the disadvantages
beacuse
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because
 kids lean fast.
Also
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, with the help of modern technology
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 can teach them in interesting
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 through stories or small
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video
 clips.
Furthermore
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,
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the primary
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school
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 twice a week to not
to
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put
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a lot
 of pressure on them.
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