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Many mesuems charge for admission while others are free. Do you think the advantages of charging people for admission to museums outweigh the disadvantages?

Since the industrialization period,
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 we can characterize a fabric
work place
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,
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 when you particularly know what you will do and what kind of profession you should choose, the time is gone. Now we become
frier
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 and more creative in
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 of future profession, than the
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 and we are exposed
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 the risks of
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instability
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 the same time. There are two opinions
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 view. The first belief
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 your chosen work should be standard and bring you money, whatever it will be like or unlike
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job
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.
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 point of view the old generation agitates usually. I think it happens because the of stability which they adapted.
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, the usual habit is ‘’to give my son or daughter my deal and work’’ which as
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 result a person lost
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 possibility in the choice of profession. The second belief
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 you should hear your heart and do what you want and don’t pay attention to the command from the society or the parents.
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 young generation usually. And as we know, the internet consists of a lot of career tests,
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inspirations
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 stories from
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bloggers,
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designers,
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managers,
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the people who open their businesses because they wanted
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.
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,
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 way doesn’t promise that you stand the life’s difficult situation and stay without a
job
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. Many of our familiars can’t find any
job
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, because they don’t know what they like. In conclusion, my opinion is the middle should be between these two beliefs. In
ideal
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 picture, the
job
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 can be paid and exciting, and everyone tries to reach it. Contrary, we should remember that the financial independent stands in the first place in our realization of
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modernity.

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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